考场上写的2011安徽高考英语作文My Approa

绝对属于第五档作文 即21-25分档

如果是我,我会给24分.即使是很严的老师,我想也不会低于21分.另外 还要考虑一下卷面书写问题.

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类似问题1： 【我写的2010安徽高考英语作文安徽英语书面表达（满分25分）假如你将参加某英语杂志社开展的一次征文活动,征文的内容要求你在电视、手机(cell)和网络三考中,放弃其中一个并陈述理由.请你】百度作业帮[英语科目]

看了一遍,觉得你的主要问题是语句不通顺 （不是说语法不对,就是这么用着有点别扭）.还有一个就是词汇还不够,在我看来用词比较简单,缺少可以为你加分的深度.这两个可能就是你得了18的原因；但我觉得你的整体结构啊什么的都是没问题的,我打的话20左右.下面在你的文里举几个例子.

“Nowadays, TV, cell, and Web are very common in our daily life. ” 如果改成 "Televisions, cell phones and the internet are all very widely used in our daily life." 就好些,名词前面不是复数应该加个 "the"

"masses of rubbish short messages" 应该是“junk message" 啦,不是"rubbish" 哦.

”there are a great deal of bad information“ 应该是 "there is", "information" 是不可数名词.还有,尽量避免用比较空泛的形容词,比如 "bad"/"good", 因为看起来觉得你词汇不够,影响打分者对你的印象.

”on some mobile phone websites“ - "some of the mobile phone websites"

"which is harmful to our mental health" - "mental development" 虽然你说的没错,但是听起来别扭.

"However, I believe that TV and Web are both useful" - "on the other hand...", 用"however"一般是在说同一件事物的不同方面时用的.

就这些,没考好也不要担心,继续努力学习吧.

类似问题2： 求一篇2011高考英语作文[英语科目]

Dear Editor-in-Chief,

Congratulations on the,5th anmiversary of Global Mirror!

I’m a regular reader of your newspaper. I like it very much mainly for the following two reasons. First, it covers both national and international news so that, by simply turning the pages, I can learn all important things that have happened during the week. Equally attractive are the success stories of world-famous people, which help me understand how a person can work hard to make the world a better place.

As a young student, I suggest that Global Mirror carry articles to guide us in our English learning , and I hope that it will become even more popular.

Sincerely yours,

Li Hua